The Veteran’s Vision: A Monologue

Title: The Veteran’s Vision: A Monologue                                               Author: Jakesbrain

Original Source: WildStar                                                                            Character(s): OC

Rating: T                                                                                                               Genre(s): Sci-fi & Horror

Chapter(s): 1                                                                                                        Status: Complete

Author’s Synopsis: The Exiles have been driven from their homes by the Dominion, forced into a desperate life of running, hiding, and skirmishing—but does this persecution suggest that their cause is just or righteous? One Dominion officer suspects that it means nothing of the sort; he knows the depths to which the Exiles are willing to sink, should their former oppressors wind up in their clutches.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10290426/1/The-Veteran-s-Vision-A-Monologue

Oh my God…  Give me a moment to collect myself.

*Takes a breath.*

All right.  *Exhales.*  I’m ready.

Welcome Readers, this is the Fan Fic Reviewer reviewing the good, the bad, and those that should never exist.  This story does not belong in the latter category!

I really like this story. I can safely give this story credit for making me interested in WildStar. Before reading this story, I had never heard of WildStar and I had no knowledge of the lore behind the game. That will be changing in the near future because this story has successfully piqued my interest.

The story itself is told by a veteran who had been on Adriatica Station (this may mean more to Readers who have played WildStar) when it was attacked and invaded by the Exiles. He recounts the attack and Dominion’s loss. Then he describes what happened to the survivors ranging from the lowborns, highborns, Drakens, and Chua. Each fate is quite gruesome. By the end of his narrative, he describes how long after the Exiles leave the station, the survivors are evacuated. The veteran even provides his view on the Exiles and their cause at the end, along with some parting advice to a fellow soldier.

From beginning to end, the veteran’s retelling of the events on Adriatica Station in one long monologue with brief interruptions for actions (ordering another drink, taking a sip, staring off into space, etc.), and it’s done beautifully. None of it feels awkward or clumsy. It moves smoothly and really brings the sense that the veteran is speaking to the Reader over some drinks at a bar. It’s wonderfully done!

Plus, through the monologue and bits of interruption, the Reader is able to get the sense that this story came about when a young soldier (the Reader) came into the bar and took up a seat near this veteran. After some base pleasantries and a few drinks, either the Reader or the Veteran brought up the topic of sympathy for the Exiles which makes the veteran start his tale. None of what I described is actually in the story but from the flow of the dialogue and actions this is what I can infer was the lead up to this fantastic tale.

Then once the story gets into what happened at Adriatica Station it’s a spectacle of epic proportions. With only the details of a survivor it is easy imagine what had taken place on the station as they looked for signs of the enemy in the distant only to find that the enemy had snuck up behind them and in greater numbers than reported. Oh! It’s fantastic! The narrative is told in a manner that eliminates the unnecessary details that other stories focus too much on. What it sacrifices in details it makes up for in emotion; the Reader can almost feel what the veteran felt during the attack. The fight scenes while minute in detail are exciting and can rival anything between the Rebel Forces and the Imperial Empire.

I think some of the best yet unnerving parts of the narration come in the form of the “punishments” that the survivors are forced to suffer through at the hands of the Exiles. Sure, I have read or seen in movies far more gruesome acts of violence, but to read it and experience it through the veteran’s story; it becomes more meaningful and real. Again the details are not excessive but the manner in which the events are told enhances the experience more, I think. Here’s a small example of what I’m talking about:

“Then the woman who’d been playin’ judge turns and gives a hand signal to the ones guardin’ our Draken. All of a sudden, all the guards start checking the safeties on their guns—to make sure they’re off, you get me? Same Draken as spoke up the first time, she sees what’s about to happen and speaks up again: ‘There’s no honor in this. You don’t dare.’

“Some human says, ‘What in all creation made you think we give a shit about honor anymore?’ And then they just start machine-gunning the Draken, right where they sit. Barely even gave ‘em time to scream. Not one minute later, there’s just a pile of corpses on that floor, an’ all over ‘em blood.”

This what I’m talking about, this basic detail that ends up painting elaborate scenes! It’s a dying art form in literature.

The last thing I have to give kiddos to this story for is the consistency in how the veteran speaks. Readers, take a look at my example again. See all of the apstrophies and the not quite right sentence structures or word usage? That is consistent throughout the story and as really brings forth the veteran’s accent. Now, I know I’ve complained about writing out accents and I still hold to that complaint, but in the case of this story since the veteran is telling the story and he has an accent then the words should reflect that accent. It’s very complex, but it’s all about how the story is being told. I’m just glad that the accent is consistent and that it’s not oppressively obvious. (If every “I” became an “Ah” then I’d complain).

That is The Veteran’s Vision: A Monologue and I highly recommend the story whether Readers have played the game or not. It is a well-written story and very engaging. Even as someone who knows nothing about the game WildStar I could follow the story easily. Give the story a read, it is worth the time.

Stars: 10/10

Possibly Maybe Review

Title: Possibly Maybe                                                                                   Author: czechers

Original Source: Ranma 1/2                                                                   Character(s): Akane & Ranma

Rating:  T                                                                                                         Genre(s): General Fiction

Chapter(s): 26                                                                                                Status: Complete

Author’s Synopsis: A collection of random Ranma/Akane tidbits place in alphabetical order. Z is for Zero: Zero is the number of kids Akane would want with Ranma.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5811666/1/Possibly-Maybe

Hello all, Fan Fic Reviewer here to review the good, the bad, and those that should never exist in fan fiction.  There’s something to be said about a collection of one-shots like this one; they’re interesting, there’s variety, not a lot of background required to understand them, and there’s a great deal of freedom in the contents. As an added bonus, they’re easy to read. I’m rather fond of one-shot collections and the mini-events that happen in them.

This specific collection I particularly enjoy because of the alphabetical theme; each chapter starts with the next letter of the alphabet (“A is for Animal Crackers,” “B is for Breakfast,” “C is for Children,” etc.) then the chapter centers on the title theme. I also like the range of emotions in the collection; there were humorous shorts, sad shorts, and cute shorts. The collection can tickle the funny bone as much as it can pull at the heartstrings.

Rather than just doing a general overview or reviewing each individual one-shot, I’m going to touch upon a small selection of the collection. I’ll start with the chronological chapters, then move on to the sadder stories, and follow up with some of my personal favorites.

As a collection of one-shots, most of them don’t fit into any sort of chronological order and most of the time they may not even exist in the same universe. However, in this collection of Ranma/Akane one-shots there are a couple of chapters that do have direct links to each other the chapters “C is for Children” and “G is for Gorilla” are the linked chapters. In these chapters Kasumi and Dr. Tofu are married and are expecting or have a child. In “C is for Children,” Kasumi and Dr. Tofu announce their expectation of a baby and it fuels a cute discourse between Akane and Ranma about having kids. Then in “G is for Gorilla,” Kasumi and Dr. Tofu’s baby is about a year old and Auntie Akane takes her beloved nephew to the zoo with Ranma. It’s another cute one-shot with some very touching moments and ends in a fitting Ranma ½ fashion.

While the two chapters can be read separately I like to read them together to see where Akane and Ranma were when the Kasumi announces her pregnancy then see where they are a year after Kasumi has her child. It’s just interesting to note where their understanding for each other and their relationship is at in the two chapters. Otherwise, the chapters are just sweet.

Now, not everything can be all rainbows, butterflies, unicorns, and happiness. Sometimes attention needs to be given to the more somber aspects of life and that includes in this collection. There are two chapters that are particularly emotional, “H is for Home” and “T is for Tea Time.” Both chapters are characterized by a muted setting and expression of words that truly illustrate how melancholy the character feels. These are well done chapters and they certainly don’t try to hide just how miserable the situations are by leaving the Reader in suspense. No, the chapters are very upfront with what has taken place in the past to make the character depressed. Instead the chapters become studies as to how the characters cope. Personally, I think “T is for Tea Time” is more poignant due to the lengths Akane goes to NOT let go of Ranma. Read the chapter to fully understand what I mean.

Finally, these are a few of my favorite one-shots and I’ll give a brief explanation of why for each one. “J is for Jealousy.” I love the role-reversal situations just because no one ever truly knows what another person is feeling until they experience it for themselves. In this case, Ranma gets a dose of the jealousy Akane feels regularly when a fiancée shows up for Akane. It’s a great short that I have to applaud for the creative way Akane handles the new fiancée situation. Oh it’s great! It feels like a mini-episode of Ranma ½ and that is a huge reason why I love the chapter.

Next is “M is for Mother in Law.” This chapter is hilarious and embarrassing! Ever wonder about Nodaka being Akane’s mother-in-law? Well, this chapter provides a small sampling and it’s hilarious! Every time I read this chapter, I am reminded of grandma from the movie “The Proposal” with the “baby maker” blanket and prayers for fertility. The chapter contains the same amount of embarrassment as Betty White’s character delivers. It’s just a funny short! Check it out.

Then there’s “R is for Reunion,” which I like mostly because it implies that Akane saved herself for a change. Shocking, I know! I also like the image provided by the chapter of Ranma returning to the Tendo residence to find a very disheveled Akane in a ruined wedding dress. The description is fantastic! This is another chapter that feels like an episode of Ranma ½ or even a movie; I can see something like this chapter happening.

“S is for Sexy.” This one I like because of the all the persuasive arguments as to why Akane’s not sexy. The arguments start off as pretty unsexy points but the more arguments that get added, the more they start saying how Akane is sexy. It’s seamless and I just love it! I especially love the ending.

Finally, “U is for Umbrella.” This chapter is adorable and really demonstrates the adage “distances makes the heart grow fonder” between Ranma and Akane. Plus, it’s the details in this chapter that really appeals to me. Just little things like Ranma wearing the scarf Akane gives him in the OVA “Tendo Family Christmas Scramble” (NOTE: That’s the English version of the title, not the Japanese translation). Little things like that make stories like this connect to the series and bring a sense of time and events passing.

Now, obviously I do recommend this collection of one-shots to Readers. I’m not blind to my glowing praises of the story, but I’ll explain why this collection should be read. One, the chapters are short and very simple to read. Two, even if a Reader doesn’t like a chapter there are 25 other chapters to read and at least one of them is bound to be enjoyable. Three, variety of situations and emotions in the chapters is fantastic. Lastly, because each chapter can be read alone, Readers can leave the collection and return to it at a later date. It’s not like a continuous story where the reading groove can be broken by an outside interruption. Instead this is a collection that a Reader can read a chapter or two when there’s a few minutes to spare.

That’s Possibly Maybe, check it out and see what chapters speak to you.

Stars: 10 of 10

A Strange Encounter Review

Title: A Strange Encounter                                                                     Author: Oakenshields’ Star

Original Source: Peter Pan                                                                    Character(s): Captain Hook & OC

Rating:  T                                                                                                       Genre(s): Humor & Romance

Chapter(s): 1                                                                                                 Status: Complete

Author’s Synopsis: Maybe locking the window before leaving, should have been your first priority!

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10287579/1/A-Strange-Encounter

Well this was a strange encounter and…I really don’t know how much credit I should give this story. For once I can call it a “story” and mean it because there’s an actual beginning, middle, and end with forward progression. There maybe not a lot of character development but I’m not going to be picky. I’m just glad to finally find something I can call a “story.” It feels like I’ve been reading dabbles, ficlets, and recaps far more often than I have been reading real stories. So I’m just relieved to be back to reading stories.

So, let’s get started!

Hi Readers, I’m your reviewing host, the Fan Fic Reviewer, reviewing the good, the bad, and those that should never exist in the world of fan fiction. This time I went digging through FFN’s “Just In” list and discovered this one-shot. Now, I’m a fan of the Peter Pan mythos! I love the original story because it’s a bit dark and not at all like the animated variations of the tale. So, I got piqued by the simple fact that the story is based off the book for Peter Pan and the vague synopsis. Alas, the synopsis does not reflect the story in the least and so I got blindsided by this romance between Hook and the story’s Original Character (OC)—although, I bet the OC is actually a Mary Sue.

I shan’t hold you up any further, dear Readers! Let us dive into this story, this “strange encounter!”

So right off the bat, the grammar needs some revision. It’s not an overwhelming problem; it’s just things that can be caught by reading through the story before posting or having someone else read through it. Most of the grammar issues are things like using “their” instead of “they’re” or incorrectly using “its” and “it’s” (again, check out the CM Punk Grammar videos on Youtube). There are punctuation type errors too that can be cleaned up with a quick read through.

Now that the basics are covered, let’s move on to the actual story. The story presents this modern woman who is working as a nanny (or something similar) until she quits because she has a new job. What job you ask? No clue. The story just says that it’s a new job but apparently it’s something that conflicts with her nanny occupation. Anyways, she goes home and finds an intruder, Captain James Hook, waiting for her with a proposal. That’s the story in a nutshell.

So, this beginning part with the job situation has me curious because it’s meant to be a scene where her employer looks like a jerk, but it doesn’t come off as such. See, the story starts with her employer asking her to watch the kids for an extra day due to work and the OC flat out refusing because of her new job (that we know nothing about). This is curious to me because if she has a new job that conflicts with her work as a nanny then, ideally, she would have given her employer (at least) 2 weeks-notice so that her employer can find a replacement. In which case, I don’t understand why the employer expects her to continue watching the kids. I understand that I’m supposed to get the impression that the employer is a douchebag, but instead I get the impression that she never gave her 2 weeks-notice and is just up and leaving.

A simple solution to this plight is to just have the OC mention giving her employer the 2 weeks-notice and him ignoring it, thus why he doesn’t have a new nanny. Alternatively, the scene could have played out as the employer saying, “I know it’s your last day, but I need you to watch the kids one more day.” That would have made it clear to me that the employer just blatantly disregards the OC’s new priorities and responsibilities (i.e. her new job). It’s a small thing and most Readers would gloss over it, but this is something that really bothers me because I see the OC as being the one at fault. Thus, I don’t sympathize with her as much as I should.

Next, let’s tackle the “romance.” I realize that Hook is a fairy tale character and thus the romance being played out like a fairy tale makes sense. However, it feels off and rather rushed. Most of the time with these fairy tale romances the characters are teenagers (seriously, there’s a mime about which Disney ladies can go to a bar and there is only 1 lady who can) who fall in love for shallow reasons or are simply brought together through dramatic experiences. There are not many characters who have deep romances (at least not until the sequels come out and explore their relationships). However, these are adult characters so I expect there to be something more to the romance. Some sort of development.

Yeah…my expectations got crushed under looks in the eyes and hormones. Seriously, the foundation of the romance is Hook observing the OC and seeing this “lost” look in her eyes as though she’d rather be somewhere else. Then the OC feeling as though Hook can see into her soul and with a few lines deludes herself into thinking that Hook knows her better than she knows herself. Now, don’t get me wrong; I believe that these types of situations happen and are genuine, but there’s normally some sort of build-up as well. Especially if the character—like the OC—is “weary of men” due to bad past experiences.

*Rubs temples.* I would have bought into this romance more if the OC had required a bit more wooing and Hook would have had to try to earn her trust and break down whatever emotional barriers the OC put up to prevent another failed relationship. Although, I don’t think she had any barriers up with how quickly she let Hook get so close to her and sweet talk her into accepting his proposal.

Oh! Speaking of which, remember that job mentioned at the beginning of the story? Yeah, I think the OC ultimately says, “Screw it” to the new job because she leaves with Hook to Wonderland. Good to know that this OC is not a dependable employee. I think those kids she was nanny to were saved when she quit, because if she was still the nanny then she would have just abandoned her charges (not that she didn’t already)! Okay, I think I’m talking myself into thinking ill of this OC.

Man, this is another missed opportunity because if the OC was in the least bit 3-dimensional as a character there could have been the whole do-I-stay-or-do-I-go debate; “what will I leave behind;” “I’m needed here;” “why can’t Hook live here?” All those types of things could have played into this story and generated a great romantic dramedy. As it is, the OC just flipped a giant bird everything and everyone in her life and abandoned them. There’s a friend who shows up (for no good reason) in the middle of the story, so I know that she has friends, if not family. Yet those bonds don’t factor into her decision to leave!

Nope! She just leaves! See you later, suckers! Peace out! Deuces!

Bitch!

See, I’m doing a good job of making myself hate this OC and it’s because I’m seeing all these…“flaws” in her character (or lack therefore of) and it’s painting a very different picture of her than I think the story intended. I think this is a good place to end before I find something new to nitpick at and make me more upset.

Ultimately would I recommend this story? It’s not a bad story. It’s weak but not everyone is looking for a strong story. Readers, if you love Peter Pan lore and are looking to kill some time then check out A Strange Encounter. It deserves a read-through. Who knows, all these faults that I find with the story may not be seen by you; thus Readers may end up enjoying the story more than me.

Stars: 4/10

A Second Chance Review

Title: A Second Chance                                                                                     Author: Kjertsi

Original Source: A Knight’s Tale                                                                 Character(s): Will & Kate

Rating:  K+                                                                                                             Genre(s): Romance

Chapter(s): 7                                                                                                          Status: Complete

Author’s Synopsis: Jocelyn’s left, and Will’s set his sights on someone else. WillKate

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/549470/1/A-Second-Chance

Welcome Readers, I am your reviewing host, the Fan Fic Reviewer, reviewing the good, the bad, and those that should never exist in fan fiction. Man…I seem to have a knack for finding these types of romances; the lackluster, half-assed ones that make me wonder why I bothered. In hindsight I should have known better given the story’s synopsis, but featured my preferred couple from the movie so I took a chance. Now I regret my decision.

So, the synopsis of the story is exactly as the author describes it; Jocelyn has left (so it’s summarized) and Will’s interest moves to Kate. Now, to the story’s credit it pretends that this isn’t “sudden” by explaining how the things that Will loves about Kate he loved before Jocelyn left but never acted upon or acknowledged because he was with Jocelyn. That reasoning is double-edged because while the story the romance is nothing “sudden” the fact that Will doesn’t act until Jocelyn is gone makes it sound like Kate is only second best. The story tries to cover its bases but it doesn’t quite work out.

The build into the romance is rather boring. Kate and Will spend some time together and there’s some flirtation, but the build is maybe 2 or 3 days with very little happening. By chapter 3 Will and Kate kiss then don’t bother to discuss their “relationship” until chapter 5 and by chapters 6 and 7 when Jocelyn kind of comes back into the picture insecurities and doubts are showcased but never resolved. It’s just a very lackluster build to this romance and it doesn’t end with much progress made except that if Will really wants to be with Kate then he’ll just have to prove to her every day that he wants her and not Jocelyn. It’s a fine moral but it doesn’t provide the closure this story needs.

Hear me out, if this story is going to end on such a moral note then it needs to have the build to provide backing to the moral. The only time these insecurities of Kate’s are brought up is in the final chapter. That’s it! There is minimal basis for the insecurities other than Will-was-with-Jocelyn-for-a-while-and-now-she-returns-married-to-another-man. If there was more to these insecurities (more instances, more issues in the relationship, etc.) then I could see the moral ending as satisfying. As it is the insecurity issue is suddenly brought up and pushed aside all in one chapter. *Sigh.* I just find that content does not equate the ending, and vice versa.

I also have to say that I didn’t like the exposition or flashback. Some of the exposition is fine, like explaining why Jocelyn is no longer around, but the exposition behind Will’s “depression” and his feelings for Kate is rather unnecessary. Show me these things, don’t just tell me about them! Then there is the flashback to the “better than any pub brawl” fight between Jocelyn and Kate that did not measure up to the “better than any pub brawl.” The flashback is from Kate’s point of view even though the setup to the flashback (as well as the rest of the story) is from Will’s point of view, and it doesn’t contribute much to the story. If it had been left as the brief description (hit it and quit it) then it wouldn’t be so bad. Instead it became a flashback that didn’t meet the hype the story created and served little purpose.

The only contribution that the flashback has to the story is that Will already knew that Kate had feelings for him before Jocelyn left. That’s it! If he already knows how she feels about him then why is he “worried” about forming a relationship with her? It’s doubtful that she’ll reject him…

*Snaps fingers.* That’s why I have such a problem with this story; there’s no obstacle! There’s nothing standing in Will’s way from getting the girl! He already knows she likes him, he knows that he’s liked her, they get time to spend together, and there’s no one really standing in his way. The only “obstacle” is Kate’s insecurity and even that has a very brief focus before being swept under the proverbial rug! That’s why the romance is so lackluster; Will and Kate don’t have to work to get to the romance!

I actually think this story would have done better as a romance for maintaining the relationship rather than starting it. It seems that the maintenance would be more interesting to read.

Now, there are a few good points to this story. It’s not horribly written and the story isn’t forcing compromising or unique situations where Will and Kate must be together. The other characters are not ignored (although they do fade into the background) and the reasoning behind Jocelyn’s disappearance is reasonable and not nearly as catty as some other stories (Jocelyn bashing type stories). So there are some good features in this story; it’s just that the main driving point of the story stands on really thin stilts and can’t keep its balance.

Would I recommend this story? *Shrugs.* If anyone is bored and is just a huge Will x Kate fan then sure. Go on a read it if all you’re looking for is a “happy ending.” However, if you’re looking for a more in-depth story then I would suggest moving on. It’s not horrible but it’s not a stellar either. It’s just a middle of the road type story.

Stars: 4/10

In the Silence Review

Title: In the Silence                                                                                                 Author: InoFan

Original Source: Mobile Suit: Gundam Wing                                            Character(s): Wufei Chang & Relena Peacecraft

Rating:  M                                                                                                                   Genre(s): Romance & Drama

Chapter(s): 10                                                                                                           Status: Complete

Author Synopsis: 5xRelena. Wufei and Relena are at odds, but they might discover something together neither of them has ever had.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/2118592/1/In-the-Silence

Welcome one and all! This is the Fan Fic Reviewer, reviewing the good, the bad, and those that should never exist in fan fiction. This time around I returned to my roots within the Gundam universe and found this story that features a couple whom I have never considered, Wufei Chang and Relena Darlian. Honestly, this coupling never entered my imaginings and apparently only a handful of people have ever considered these two characters as a potential couple. It’s not like they interact a lot during the series (if at all) and if they came to know each other post the series and movie then it would probably have been on professional terms, so the idea just never occurred to me. Thankfully, it occurred to InuFan and thus why I was able to read In the Silence.

The basic premise of the story is, a traumatic event happens during an escort mission that establishes a bond between Wufei and Relena that opens that door into the realm of romantic possibilities but there are internal shadows that hold one of them back. *Pauses and rereads sentence.* I know I’m making it very vague and actually I can picture several different stories arising from that description but I’m trying to avoid spoilers. On to the meat of this review!

This story has many good points so I guess I’ll start with the basics. The formatting is excellent and makes it very Reader-friendly, spelling and grammar are great (nothing too bothersome). I know that these are basics but it really helps me when I’m reading a story then I can concentrate on the plot and characters rather than being distracted by the constant misuses of commas, quotes, periods, lack of spaces between words, misspellings, etc. Those things distract me after a while and make me nit-pick a lot more than normal.

Another thing this story does very well is the characterization of Relena and Wufei. I realize that fans know these characters from the manga and the anime, but since the story takes place years after the events of Endless Waltz the story had to expand and restructure the characters a bit to make up for the passage of time and maturity that (usually) occurs with people as they gain more life experiences. So, the Relena in the story is the overdramatic, strict pacifist, stalker—NOTE: That was never my impression of her from the series but other fans would disagree—and instead she’s a self-possessed woman who recognizes her strengths and weaknesses, and strives to be independent. This is a version of Relena that I love and I think is among the most realistic. Wufei on the other hand is a minimalist who does stray outside the realm of work and does not seek out the attentions of other people.

I like the reboot of these characters and I like how the character development is handled in the story. It’s not just a long exposition as to who the characters are in the story versus how they were in the manga/anime. Instead bits and pieces are dropped here and there throughout the story, providing another piece to the puzzle and a bit more insight. It’s spaced out so well that I don’t feel overwhelmed with the details or lost due to a lack of detail. There’s a nice balance!

Another thing this story does well is keeping a relatively even pace. The event flow from one into the next with ease and I don’t get the feeling that things happen too fast or slow. Even the chemistry between Wufei and Relena actually fits which is weird because typically when stories try to pull what In the Silence pulls with the romance, I call BS on the romance. In this story it fits and I think I know why. The biggest difference between the romance in this story versus other stories is that neither Relena nor Wufei say that they “love” each other. It’s attraction, infatuation, lust, and any other synonym. It’s never called anything more than that, yet the story suggests that perhaps in the future it could grow into love. *Applauds.* I can get behind this kind of a romance!

See, when other romances do the same thing and attach the word “love” to the romance then I take great issue with the story and tear down the romance from the status of “love” to “lust.” It bothers me when stories use the word “love” when clearly the relationship is not based upon “love” but rather sexual desires or attraction built upon a common interest. When I read those romances I get pissed and I typically write off the author as a teen whose only experience with love has been a boyfriend of 3 months or teen-romance movies. In the Silence depicts a very adult (not necessarily sexual) relationship between the characters where it starts as attraction and has the potential to become something more. I love it!

Then there’s the sexual tension. Some stories don’t build sexual tension quite right. Sure stories provide the sexual tension moments where someone’s up against a wall, someone’s wet from something or other (rain, shower, whatever else), someone gets pinned to the floor, and so on. What those stories fail to do is provide this sexual tension where one or both characters are actively trying to maintain control and say “no” to urges. It’s the whole carrot and stick method. In the Silence does this well with the sexual tension between Wufei and Relena. There is enough that happens (or suggested to happen) to keep the Reader on edge with bated breath with each encounter.

Going along with the sexual tension build, a lot of stories will have the tension explode into a wild sex scene. Not this story! There is a sex scene but it’s elegantly written (it’s like watching a tastefully filmed sex scene in a movie), and it’s not all passionate kisses, roaming hands, fumbling fingers, and cries of “harder.” No, the sex scene is actually more relaxed. In fact, it really shows that these two characters aren’t just striving to reach their climax and the ecstasy that comes with it, but they are attempting to make it more…intimate and personal. *Pauses.* Those may not be the right words for what I’m trying to describe but they’ll have to do.

Finally, the story closed on a realistic note that was also very optimistic. It has this tone of contentment that I don’t read often in other stories and I’m pleasantly surprised to read in this story. Seriously, the ending is exactly what it should be given the mature relationship the story builds. I love the ending and it certainly brought a smile to my features.

From beginning to end In the Silence hits all the right notes and really convinced me that this odd couple could actually be a legitimate couple under the right circumstances. I hope that I can find more stories like this one in the future.

Would I recommend In the Silence? I think the obvious answer is, yes! I highly recommend this story, even if you know very little or nothing of Gundam Wing. It’s a well written romance that snatches the Reader’s attention and keeps it throughout the story.

Stars: 10/10