Title: My Ojousan Author: vegie kun
Source: Gundam Wing A/C Character(s): Relena P. & Duo M.
Rating: T Genre(s): Adventure / Romance
Chapter(s): 11 Status: Complete
Author’s Synopsis: During a stressful conference Relena meets up with a certain Gundam pilot who brings laughter and chaos into her life. But the fun ends as quickly as it begins when a new enemy appears, headed by the most unexpected person.
Welcome Readers, I really needed a good story to read this week. It’s been a stressful one and I had hoped to find something really good to make me forget about the stress. Well, this story is not quite as awesome as I was expecting, but it was a great distraction. I returned to the Gundam Wing fandom and took a look at the non-cannon couples. It’s always interesting seeing how fans make the non-cannon couples happen and work; stories like this one make me leave saying, “Yeah, I could see those two characters as lovers.”
Ladies and Gentlemen, I am your reviewing host, the Fan Fic Reviewer; here to review the good, the bad, and those that should never exist in fan fiction. Today I am reviewing one for the few Duo x Relena romances I found on FFN. It’s amazing how out of all the Gundam pilots Duo is least romantically associated with Relena. If he’s included in a romance story with Relena it’s normally as Heero’s boyfriend. The fact that the romance is between Duo and Relena is what piqued my interest.
The story feels like an action movie. Two friends reunite only to be pulled into an assassination plot and they must stay on the run to survive. Thankfully the one leading the assassination team is none other than Heero Yuy and he’s doing everything he can to sabotage the assassination with the help of circus clown, Trowa Barton.
Similar to an action movie, this story is fun to read and I enjoyed it; however, it has some weak points. One such point is the use of a character’s thoughts, I don’t mind it when a story shares character thoughts but they should be used judiciously and should not replace actual dialogue. In this story, characters have full internal conversations with themselves; conversations that analyze their motives, feelings, etc. To me there is no need to tell the Reader the entire internal dialogue a character has when it’s just as (if not more) effective to describe the internal dialogue. It takes fewer words and can convey the message better than having the character argue with themselves.
This is more prevalent in the early chapters as Duo and Relena reunite and the seeds of romance take root. As the story progresses those type of thoughts are replaced by more effective thoughts such as Heero trying to figure out his former assassin comrades’ plans and how best to protect Relena. The major difference between Heero’s internal dialogue and the Duo’s is the length and topics. Duo’s are like devil versus angel arguments to illustrate his confliction over his new found feelings for Relena, while Heero’s are concise and focused on analyzing what needs to be done. In a way, Heero’s internal dialogue reminds me of Robert Downy Jr’s Sherlock Holmes; the quick, efficient analysis before getting right back into the action.
That’s my only real grievance with the story. I could gripe on about how Duo and Relena fall in love within a week but since the story is written like an action movie it makes sense. This story isn’t written to be a serious romance that is built up over long periods of time, it’s meant to be a romance that builds up during the course of a traumatic experience. So, to me how quickly the romance comes about is not an issue.
In fact, the romance is handled well. There is the romance between Duo and Relena, which starts off slow and a bit dating sims clichéd but as the story progresses it improves. Suddenly, the focus is not on making these two seem like a cutesy potential couple, but two people who feel for each other while struggling with their own sense of right and wrong. Is it right for them to feel these romantic urges for each other? Isn’t it like a betrayal because there’s the unstated truth that Heero love Relena? Both of them struggle with these kind of questions while still wanting to maybe pursue a relationship after they survive the assassination plot.
On the flip side, there’s the romance between Heero and Relena. It’s not a love triangle because Heero’s not fighting with Duo to win Relena or trying to stop the two from being together. Instead, Heero and Relena’s romance in this one is a mature one; it’s the romance where one party decides it’s time to leave and give blessing for the other party to seek love elsewhere. Heero quite literally takes the time to tell Relena that she should stop waiting for him and follow her feelings to pursue Duo. On Relena’s side, it’s that crossroads of not wanting to betray her first love that was never fully realized in order start a new love with Duo. It’s a beautiful confliction that doesn’t become the focus of the story and is treated as being emotionally complex; as it should be.
How the story handles Heero and Relena’s unrequited romance is part of the reason why I enjoyed the story so much. It doesn’t linger too long on the topic but it doesn’t shove it into a closet to never address again. It is there and it becomes prevalent during the moments of calm – the moment when the characters can catch their breathes and their minds distract them with thoughts of “what ifs.” This is a way to juggle the romance with the action that just appeals to me.
The last part I’ll touch on is the original characters. There’s not a lot but there are a handful of original characters who fill in the cast and rather than becoming the Mary Sue and Gary Stu type characters, these ones feel natural. They feel like characters that would have been found in the Gundam Wing world. There’s the politician who is looking to gain more resources to defend his country from attack even if those resources come at the expense of the Sanq Kingdom, Relena’s life, and the lives of those in the former Sanq Kingdom. He’s a flaw character and one with misguided motives and means, but he’s very much human.
There’s the assassins who have distinct personalities and ways of handling their missions. One assassin has so much pride in his abilities that he cannot stomach the fact that the promotion he worked for went to a much younger and newer member of the guild. Another assassin is a bit more easygoing; appreciative of life but enjoy his work as an assassin because “you should enjoy what you do for a living.” These are characters who are grounded in reality while being mixed into this extreme, unrealistic situation.
I don’t always like original characters but these were the types that helped to expand the world and fill in the blank spots; they do not take the spot light away from the main cast or allow themselves to fall into obscurity. These are the types of OCs that help build the story, not steal it.
In the end, I would recommend this story. I do suggest hanging in there during the first few chapters because it feels a bit sluggish and it is a bit of set up. However, once the action hits, the story takes off and it is so worth it. If Readers have the time, check out My Ojousan on FFN.
Stars: 7.5 / 10