Title: Cobwebs and Gears Author: FlameWolf
Source: Five Nights at Freddy’s Character(s): OCs, Animatronics, Scott, & Fitz
Rating: R Genre(s): Abuse, Angst, MCD, MiCD
Chapter(s): 6 Status: On-Going
Author’s Synopsis: Rose has been working for the Fredbear Franchise for longer than she could remember. She has seen things that many would find hard to believe, even discovering that the animatronics she cherished are alive. Things only get scary when a new person joins day security. Soon her friends are acting almost dangerous and she finds herself wondering if there’s a connection to the new guy. If she doesn’t find out the answers soon, she may end up as another victim.
Welcome Readers! So, it took me a bit to find something to review. I looked at the lists of “Plan to Read” and “To Review” and nothing stuck out to me. In fact, I looked at what I had readily available to read or review and thought, “Man, I really need a change of pace.” Almost everything I had available was: Dragon Age, Ranma ½, Labrynth, MirrorMask, Gundam Wing, or X-Men (comics, movie, and cartoons). It kind of felt like I returning the same fandoms to review! So, I decided to take some time and find something that was not one of my normal fandoms, something different. Thus, I ended up at adult-fanfiction.org checking out their Misc. Video Games catalog.
Ladies and gentlemen, I am your reviewing host, the Fan Fic Reviewer; here to review the good, the bad, and those that should never exist in fan fiction. Today I went into the world of FNAF (Five Nights at Freddy’s) to find what is probably the tamest story I’ve ever come across on Adult-fanfiction.org. Like I’m familiar with the FNAF franchise and lore; I’m also familiar with how horrible some stories can be when the fandom begs for fetish fiction. However, I apparently lucked out and found something that doesn’t involve animatronic sex, torture, or sadism.
The synopsis above is pretty accurate for what the story entails. I’m just going to include a few other tidbits. This story does not directly follow FNAF lore; it uses key events and characters but does not constrain itself to the lore from the video games or that’s being developed in the books. I feel this is an important detail because during the 6 chapters (thus far) there are events that line up with the games but are tweaked just enough to make them not fit. Anyone who started reading this story thinking it was going to follow the lore and add to it would be a bit disappointed or turned off.
Personally, I find that the story not adhering to the lore is great. I think there’s enough nods to the original lore to recognize when and where events line up, but enough of it is changed to make this a completely new story. For instance, in this story the animatronics weren’t made by William Afton (at least not the originals), instead they were made but previous owner of Faz Bear’s Family Diner (an original character that is deceased by the start of the story) and the current owner has bought updated versions (like the ones from FNAF 2) from a third party manufacturer. Things like that are great because as the story progresses the Reader has to wonder if the animatronics had souls before the children’s bodies were put inside them. Things like that make me enjoy alternate lore so much.
Another touch that I like that is non-canon is that Foxy is a re-design / updated version of a previous animatronic called Fritz that was decommissioned prior to the story. The rest of Fritz is left to rust away in the back until later in the story as our protagonist tries her best to put him back in working order – essentially making Mangle. That’s cool to me! That’s a cool spin on the lore! Mangle came before Foxy and is the result of odd parts because Foxy is currently using those parts.
In this re-imagining I like that the animatronics are seen interacting with people of all ages throughout the day. They clearly have special guidelines to make them partial to children and wanting to see to the kids’ happiness and safety. However, towards adults the animatronics are limited to how they can respond. For instance, the animatronics never behave hostile towards the adult guests or workers – although they will stare at the new security guard. It’s never anything that would cause the customers or workers to think anything was “wrong” but it’s enough to create a sense of paranoia and fear in the employees.
At night, the animatronics don’t go charging down the halls trying to get to the night shift guard or attacking the employees in general. However, they do make a couple of frightening visits to the homes of a couple employees and help Rose repair their fallen comrades. The most hostile animatronics come after the bite of 1983 – FNAF 4 – and the first murder victim that became the puppet. Once these two events occur the unease that the animatronics created increased and changed to terror.
Speaking of the terror, there are a few jump scare moments done to the characters but Readers won’t have those same experiences. The real horror in this story comes from the environment and the character Rose as she experiences these unsettling sights, describes her own unease and what creates it, and the Reader’s own knowledge of what’s about to happen. It’s unsettling how something that a child sees as a “friend” – like Springtrap – interacts with the children during the day then invites one child to stay after closing for a “special game.”
For instance, there’s one scene where I almost jump scared myself. The story was from the first victim’s view and he was playing hide and seek in the diner after hours when suddenly Springtraps head pops up where the kid is hiding. Spoiler! Nothing actually happens at that moment, but because I was expecting the worst and I know that the child dies somehow, I worked myself up enough to become fearful for the child. It is this sense of anxiety and fear that this story builds, and I appreciate it. This is a great way to encapsulate the feeling of horror in a story about these living animatronics.
I’ve praised the story in all the ways that I can without spoiling much. Where could it improve? Currently, I don’t think there’s much to improve upon. The story is doing such a great job of crafting this alternate telling and providing original characters that have their own background and personalities that it all fits seamlessly into the FNAF lore. Sure there are a few grammar mistakes but those are pebbles against this mountain. I think where this story going and how it’s been crafted is perfect for it.
Now, I will touch on a few things that I am looking forward to actually seeing in this story in the future. I hope to see or hear about Sister Location at some point; I don’t think this story can ignore the animatronics at Sister Location and I think that the dark entities of the animatronics from Sister Location would help fuel the terror being created by the Puppet and the shadow animatronics. I am looking forward to a point where Rose and maybe Scott – the night shift guard – have to barricade themselves in the guard room and survive the night. I kind of want to see some of the games from Freddy’s Pizzeria make a showing. Some of the Easter Eggs from those games would be frightening for Rose to discover.
The story is still going and I look forward to reading more.
I highly recommend this story whether you’re a FNAF fan or not. It does not require knowledge about the lore – but it helps – making it friendly to Readers who might be new to the franchise. The story stirs up enough fear and paranoia in the Reader to give that taste of fear without leaving the Reader scarred. Personally, I read this at night and I had to close the curtains because it created a sense of paranoia in me that I became spooked by the idea of something being outside my window. Now, if that’s a bit much then read the story during the day hours; either way, read it.
Stars: 10 / 10